One Last Meme...

[elementalhero]

Stolen from digthenym :

Okay, flist, time to get constructive and critical... but nicely, please.

Pick one piece of fanfiction I've written.  I'll tell you one thing I didn't like about it, one thing I did and one thing I wish I would have done differently.  Then, you give me one thing you didn't like, one thing you liked and one comment about it.  The comment can be a question or in general remark or whatever you want.  Post this in your journal so I can do the same.

Comments

[digthenym.livejournal.com]

In response to your replies :o)

-Madara is such an intimidating character--so much so that I'm probably never going to try writing him if I can help it. There's just so many layers to him--and those are just the ones that the readers can be sure about at this point in the series *shifty eyes* but I think that for the brief appearance they made, they certainly didn't seem OOC to me :o)

-That part had such a creepy/foreboding feel to it! Really captured the doom mood, if that makes any sense?

-Oh god, tenses are my NIGHTMARE. They have to be the worst part of writing for me, since my mind for some reason only writes default in the present tense and sometimes I screw up on the transition.

My turn :o)

One thing I liked

I like that you can tell, just by the first chapter, that this is going to be a very character-intensive piece and that you've put a TON of thought into word choice/structure/setting/voice. It really shows :o)

One thing I didn't

NO ITACHI X SAKURA

NEED MOAR TO REEEEAAAAD XD This was a prologue, so I feel like I've got the sense of the story, but it ends on a bit of a cliffhanger XDD

Question!

Are you going to work a Team 7/Itachi friendship angle into it? If not, who are the main characters Itachi is going to be interacting with (if that's okay for me to know XD)

I would love to help beta for you! My email's the same as my AIM 8DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD!!!!