GANKED FROM HUNGRYTIGER11

[elementalhero]

Comment with a story I've written, and I will tell you one thing I knew, learned, or wondered about while writing the story that didn't make it onto the page.

And/or, as a bonus:

Give me one of my own stories, and a timestamp sometime in the future after the end of the story, or sometime in the past before the story started, and I'll write you at least a hundred words of what happened then, whether it's five minutes before the story started or ten years in the future.


do it up~

Comments

[hungrytiger11.livejournal.com]

I'll bite. Give me something about "Fugue." Either meme (or even both!) of the memes is fine!

[okroginator.livejournal.com]

Lol, if you want the second meme, you have to give me a timestamp. ^^;;

Fugue

I knew: Shisui was also jealous of the time Itachi spent with Sasuke, but I never ended up putting a Sasuke scene in there because any attempts kept pulling the fic's focus off course.

I learned: I'm still a total pansy when it comes to sex scenes. |D I also seem to have developed this fetish for mindf**kery. >.>

I wondered: why we never got to see any interaction between Danzou and Itachi in flashback. I feel like that's something Kishimoto ought to show us.

[redbrunja.livejournal.com]

Insomniac, for both. timestamp: two weeks after the end.

[okroginator.livejournal.com]

Insomniac

I knew: that it was going to end contrarily to canon.

I learned: that I should have more confidence in my own writing style. Not everyone can be Chuck Palahniuk, and I only looked(/was) insecure and stupid for trying.

I wondered: about Itachi and Shisui's history while writing it. I made several attempts at actually having them interact in a scene, but gave up because I had no idea how I wanted to characterize Shisui. Obviously, Fugue fixed that. |D

An extra bit of trivia: The original "script" for Insomniac was even worse in terms of cheap half-plagiarism; I was originally going to go really AU, have a lot more Shisui, and have him and Itachi start something like a fight club. That was scrapped fast because it made no sense and was a dumb idea (and also, as stated above, Shisui was a problem for me at the time).


two weeks after the end

She's heard rumors.

She's just been too scared to act on them until now.

Anko doesn't knock before opening the door to his house. The only lit household for blocks. It had been like walking through a ghost town to get here.

No.

Not "like." She did walk through a ghost town to get here.

The kid's sitting alone at the table. There's an unfurled scroll in front of him. Academy homework. He's back at Academy already? Anko makes a mental note to verbally set someone in the Academy hierarchy on fire about this.

"Who're you?" Uchiha Sasuke asks without even turning around.

"A friend," she says. She's not going to add whose friend she is.

Was.

Isn't.

"Please go away," he says, and it's so small, so empty, so goddamn polite that--that it's reminding her of all the wrong things, and--and this isn't how she had planned it out in her head.

That's a lie. Anko never plans anything out. She just goes with whatever stupid idea jumps into her head and this is a stupid idea and now she's stuck.

"No," she says. She walks over and sits across from him at the table. He won't meet her gaze, but she can see that he's not reading the scroll in front of him at all. He's just staring at it, or through it, maybe. "I just came here to..."

...To what?

To tell this boy, this child, how badly she fucked up? That maybe it was her fault his brother self-destructed? Worse, to tell him it wasn't her fault? That maybe it was no one's fault? That sometimes these things just happen?

Let's start over. "Look, it's... It's not your fault," she says, stammers. "I know, when you're a kid, you think...you think everything's your fault, and maybe sometimes it is, but a lot of the time it really isn't. Sometimes it's just because..."

Because the world isn't fair.

Because the world doesn't care how many children have died before.

Because people are blind and stupid and don't notice what goes on around them.

Because everything dies, in the end, but sometimes, they don't do it fast enough.

Anko realizes she's crying, she's been crying for the past several seconds, and Sasuke's staring at her with naked confusion and half-revulsion, because he doesn't know who this woman is and what she wants and why she's just walked into his life, into his despair, and he doesn't know what right she has to cry.

She doesn't either.

Anko ends up sleeping there at the table for the whole night, with Sasuke on the couch watching her warily for most of the ngith with his knees drawn up to his chest until he drifts off, too.

////gaaah this has no real conclusion, sorry

[redbrunja.livejournal.com]

I learned: that I should have more confidence in my own writing style.

Word. Not that you looked stupid, but you shouldn't have to /try to hide behind someone else's style.

Also, the thought of Itachi and Shinsui starting a fight club makes me lol so hard. Because seriously, ninjas? they're beating up people IRL - if anything, they'd like, be really subversive and outé and start a knitting or a scrap-booking club.

Also, I really, really liked that ficlet. The thought of Anko coming to Sasuke to theoretically try and make it okay for him but really be there to make it okay for her is awesome.

Tiny nitpick: you switch pov in right towards the end, and it really throws the reader out of the flow of the story.

[okroginator.livejournal.com]

if anything, they'd like, be really subversive and outé and start a knitting or a scrap-booking club.

omg I should write that *A* But yeah, the fight club thing got scrapped fast because lol, dumb.

you switch pov in right towards the end, and it really throws the reader out of the flow of the story.

Are you takling about the ficlet, or Insomniac itself?

[redbrunja.livejournal.com]

In the ficlet. I just wanted to give you a heads up if you ever decided to repost it.